4.
At the begining of my junior year I first learned about adobe pro and the different elements it has to offer in video editing. I was taught what the different pattern where meant to do and how to upload videos in to adobe pro. I learn key words to use adobe pro properly such as import and export .I was taught how to set videos clips on a time line and if i ended up not wanting to use that clip i was taught how to ripple delete.I learned the importance of in points and out point. You can clearly see in one of my first videos for expamle the baler pride one i effecting cut interview clips i had of people and put them togteher so that they where shorter and flowed. It shows that i was about to recored something them upload to the computer and then proceed to import into adobe pro. Yet you call tell by my first project that i still was not clear on how to edit and the video wasnt as smooth as i wanted it to be . On my seconed project which i believe was the video with your beautiful wife riding her horse at a horse show. We where givien the instruction of using overlays and inters to edit this video. Honeslty at first i did not under stand the differences between overlays and inserts. The two consepts where confusing to me at first and this video took longer to edit because of that reason. Yet i did end up learning that in an over lay the editior simply puts the video he wants over the video he or she wanted to replace. In an insert you atually ripple delete a clip of a video then insert the video you would like.A scene that shows that i have learned these skills well is in the video labeled "got jumps" at the bottom of my blog. Later in the year i showed i learned the concept well in the sexting video that i help in because we took from different clips and put them together using over lays and inserts to out the video in a functional way. Plus i got a good grade on that project to it obviously shows that i know what i am doing.
5. This teledamtic art class has taught me alot about the thought and planning that goes into making a film. From the music to the angle of the camera each of these aspects surves a a purpose in getting the films point across. For example if you want your view to fell that they could relate to the character or could clearly see the emotion of the character you are trying to flim you could use camera shot such as close ups to show the viewers emotions or use high or low angles to show the the character is in a vaulnerble or in charge of a situation. A film maker can provoke feeling in the viewer or show what a character is feeling withou using dialouge by using certain types of music and camera angles.
Tuesday, May 29, 2012
Thursday, May 24, 2012
One Love
In Liz and I video one love we tired to envoke a feeling of compassion and hope for nature and the animals in it. We want wanted to the audience to see and love nature and its purest and best, then we wanted people to see what the human spieies as a whole is doing to our envoirment and wild life. We wanted our audience to be a little disturbed at what they saw to envoke a sense of urgencie in them to make them want to help and protect the enviorment.
From the middle where the trere is on fire to about the end ,we used intense images and alot of dark effects to get out point across. until about the very end we use more lighter effect like solorize and effects of that sort to give the end of the movie a lighter feel and the feeling of hope as if something could and can be done to help our envioremnt and to show that people and animals could exsist.We did not use alot of abstract images.
Friday, May 4, 2012
JABBRWOCKY
For the jabberwocky video the effect Liz and i used best was the solorized effect of the hand and the twirl effect we used on the picture with the two guys jumping. First we used the soorized effect and it gave the picture an intense feel to it witch we were going for. Yet it was not only intense but softened at the end giving the picture a relaxing irie feel.There wasent a certain idea we were trying to capture since the poem dosent really make sense we belive the idea didnt really have to either. The second effect we liked used was the twirl. It worked very well with the picture because the men in the jumping in a silly manor and the twirl effect added to it. The mood we were trying to go for was playful and light hearted.
Monday, April 2, 2012
walk the line
In our video, Luis and I clearly cover all the key points when it comes to taking the Start test. Not only do we cover them but we creatively explain why the Star test is important. We also go over some tips that could be very useful when it comes to taking the Star test. One of my favorite elements about this video is the music Luis chose, it is catchy and up-beat. It makes the underclassmen pay attention to the video because it's funny and fast-paced Our transtions are awesome thanks to luis and our video in gerneral is awsome, why wouldnt you vote for us?
Tuesday, March 27, 2012
Comment review
The conflict was between Shasha and the baseball player.
Shots, dialouge, action:
1 The scene of the playser walking to the baseball field.
2 The panning of the field.
3 THe shot where the baseball player hits the ball
4 Demi walking across the field.
You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. Thje climax occured when the baseball player ran away.
During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner.
You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life.
I especially liked the shot where the two ators are walking to the baseball field with the props. It helps add to the organicness of the sotyr and plot.
I don't think any shots need to be added. Just fix the editing when the baseball player hits then ball and when he runs away.
6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music.
Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits.
Overall the film was okay. If they were to work on the editing and music it would make the film better
This post is from CASSANDRA
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from CASSANDRA (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). CASSANDRA told us that SHE LIKED WHEN WE WERE WALKING TO THWE BASEBALL FIELD WITH THE PROPS, and that was helpful because IT MADE US FEEL LIKE WE DID A GOOD JOB ON THE VIDEO. In addition, CASSANDRA told us that NO SHOTS NEED TO BE ADDED, and that helped us see that WE DID GOOD ON OUR VIDEO.
The two best suggestions we got were from ___________________________ and ___________________________ (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
Luis said...
The conflict was between whether they should let the car owner know they broke their car window or not. The shots that contributed to the rising action was when Demi and Jorge started running. The climax occured when Demi decided to tell the car owner that they broke his window.We especially liked the shot where Jorge is telling Demi that he cannot let the car owner know about the window and then just runs of. We rate your editing a 6; use cleaner shots and make the video flow smoother. We suggest you guys use music when Demi and Jorge run off to add tension to the overall effect of the film. Your titels and credits wher good. Overall good job!
-Luis and Lizzy
This post is from LUIS and LIZZY.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from LUIS and LIZZY (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). THEY told us that THEY LIKED WAS WHEN I TOLD DEMI THAT I CANNOT LET THE CAR OWNER KNOW THAT I BROKE HIS/HER WINDOW, and that was helpful because WE KNOW WE CAPTURED THE VIEWERS ATTENTION. In addition, LUIS ANS LIZZY told us that THEY SUGGESTED WE USE MUSIC and that helped us see that MUSIC WOULD MAKE THE SHORT FILM A WHOLE LOT BETTER AND ENTERTAINING.
The two best suggestions we got were from ___________________________ and ___________________________ (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
The conflict was between telling the truth and not telling the truth.
Here are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. Dialog: When George says “Let’s get out of here”
2. Dialog: When Demi says “Wait, shouldn’t we tell the person”
3. Dialog: When George says “No way no one saw us do it…”
4. Action: When they are first running away.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising actions:
1. You could have someone be a witness to the accident.
2. You could also have the car alarm go off which brings attention to them and the truck.
The climax occurred when Demi stays at the Baseball field when Jorge decides to run away because he is scared.
The resolution is when Demi admits to Alicia that she hit her car, and Alicia accepts her apology without making her pay for the damages.
You could add to the resolution by making Jorge come back and feel bad because Demi confessed instead of him. Basically, what happens is Jorge confesses and stops Demi from taking the blame this would help the audience understand that confessing, and owning up to the truth is better than your own self-pride.
We especially like the back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, because it helped emphasize the idea that the hitting and pitching was in actual time (realistic).
We think you should replace the shot when Jorge and Demi are having the conversation in the beginning (the two-shot with the rule of thirds). The new shot would still be a two-shot, but maybe instead fix the angle because the angles alternate from one side of the characters to the other.
On a scale of 1-10, we give the editing a 5. One edit we would change was when Jorge is trying to leave because there are about three clips that are cut off. Jorge’s dialogue and facial expressions are very choppy, and usually cut too late in the beginning of the clips and too early in the end of the clips.
We noticed that between the two-shot conversation and the transition onto the track near the baseball field, you used a straight cut. We would have used a dissolve, or a fade to black instead because it was very confusing that the locations changed so suddenly without a proper transition.
There was no music in this video. The places I think music could be added is in the beginning of the video when Jorge and Demi first have there conversation. I think it would be a good idea to add some fast-paced, low music to imply that there are young yet civil with each other. Another place sound-effects could be added is when the ball hits the windshield, possibly a car alarm sound as Jorge and Demi run away. Another place where you could use music is when Demi confesses to Alicia that she hit the car.
The title of the film was “The Fly Ball”, which gave us an introduction to what the film would be about. It grabbed our attention because the fluorescence of the blue around the title was fantastic. The only other suggestion we have for the opening title is to center it. There was only one title to work with (the opening title). There were No Credits, so you may want to include those next time.
Overall, we thought you film sent a good message about honesty. What we liked best was the acting of Demi and Jorge because they are rarely seen in front of the camera. Our Strongest suggestion is that you include music, and definitely fix the editing/ cuts because they are a little choppy and exclude some of the essence of the film.
-Bree and Liz
This post is from BREE and LIZ.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from BREE and LIZ. (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). THEY told us that THEY LIKED THE BACK AND FORTH SHOT OF ME AND DEMI PITCHING/HITTING THE BALL, and that was helpful becauseWE KNOW WE DID A GOOD JOB ON THE EDITING BECAUSE SHE REALLY ACTUALLY DINT PITCH THE BALL TO ME In addition, BREE AND LIZ told us that IN ONE OF THE SHOTS WE COULD OF USED A DISSOLVE SHOT INSTEAD OF A STRIGHT CUT SHOT, and that helped us see that WE COULD WORK A LITTLE MORE ON OUR EDITTING.
The two best suggestions we got were from ___________________________ and ___________________________ (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
RYAN AND JULISSA
The conflict was between the girl and the boy.
1. The baseball player walking up to Sasha and asking for help with baseball.
2. The boy says to throw the ball higher.
3. The girl pitching low and suddenly throwing the ball hard.
4. A swing at the ball going far.
Suggestions:
1. You could give more spacing in between cuts and less space between other cuts.
2. You could also add a resoultion to show that the boy learned a lesson somehow.
The climax occured when the boy decides to run away after hitting a car and scuddadling out of there.
During the resoultion the girl decides to go and come clean about hitting the car and proving that you will get in less trouble by telling the truth and owning up to your responsibilites.
You could add to the resolution by having the boy show up and say something about how it was wrong to run away and he's sorry. This would help give us the impression that the boy learned a lesson or something like that.
Camera Shots:
We especially like the medium shot of the establishing shot, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were practicing at a real baseball field.
We think that you might add a shot right after the ball hits the car to see the damage. This would help the idea that a car really got damaged.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was after the boy talks about "getting out of there" after he hit the ball. We thought the out point was set to early or late because we couldn't clearly understand what he was saying.
We noticed that between your establishing shot and first shot of the boy holding the bat you used a fade to black. We would have used exactly what you used. Good job!
Music/Sound:
There was no music but good job!
Titles&Credits:
Yes, I think this title was very appealing and stood out to the viewers.
The titles were not centered and need to be fixed. They were pretty effective except for the fact that they were not centered.
Credits:
There were no credits. Great job!
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film was great and a good message and point to prove. What we liked best was the dedication you put to your characters. Our strongest suggestion is that you clean up the cuts to make it flow smoother.
AMAZING JOB GUYS!
This post is from RYAN and JULISSA.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from RYAN and JULISSA. (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). THEY told us that THEY LIKED THE MEDIUM SHOT OF THE ESTABLISHING SHOT BECAUSE IT HELPED EMPHASIZE THE IDEA THAT WE WERE PRACTICING IN A REAL BASEBALL FIELD, and that was helpful because WE KNOW WE DID A GOOD JOB ON SHOTTING IN DIFFERENT POSSITIONS/ANGLES. In addition, RYAN AND JULISSA told us that WE COULD USE A SHOT TO SHOW THAT THE CAR GOT DAMAGED, and that helped us see that WE CAN IMPROVE OUR SHORT FILM, A WHOLE LOT BETTER WITH MUSIC AND SPECIAL EFFECTS.
The two best suggestions we got were from Casandra and Jay (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
“You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. The climax occured when the baseball player ran away.
During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner.
You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life”. WE PLAN ONE TO USE THESE SUGGESTIONS BECAUSE THEY ADRESSES OUR PROBLEMS PERFECTLY. THEY DECRIBE WHAT COULD TAKE OUR VIDEO TO THE NEXT LEVEL IN DETAIL AND DESCRIBE HOW WE SHOULD GO ABOUT FIXING OUR VIDEO. THEY ALSO SUGGEST
“6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music.
Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits”. We agree with this suggestion that we and our plan to address is indeed look for and at copy right friendly music. Also we plan on fixing some of our shots so that they are more believable and not so choppy throughout the video. Also in their suggestions they tell us where music could be added which is a big help because it gives an idea of where we could put music that the audience would like.
Bree and Liz said: “1. You could have someone be a witness to the accident.
2. You could also have the car alarm go off which brings attention to them and the truck.
The climax occurred when Demi stays at the Baseball field when Jorge decides to run away because he is scared.
The resolution is when Demi admits to Alicia that she hit her car, and Alicia accepts her apology without making her pay for the damages.
You could add to the resolution by making Jorge come back and feel bad because Demi confessed instead of him. Basically, what happens is Jorge confesses and stops Demi from taking the blame this would help the audience understand that confessing, and owning up to the truth is better than your own self-pride.
We especially like the back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, because it helped emphasize the idea that the hitting and pitching was in actual time (realistic).” We agree with this suggestion , and our plan to address it is by actually adding more sound effects to our video to give it a more realistic feel and make it more enjoyable for our audience. So we do plan on putting more sound affects with the car.
Cristabel & Jessica
1. “you could do more closeups.
2. you could also add the sound of shaterring glass.
the climax occured when the girl goes to talk to the owner of the car.
during the resolution the girl apologizes to the owner of the car and the owner forgives her and tells her its ok she doesnt have to pay.
we especialy like the shot where the boy runs away but the girl stays because it helps emphasize the idea of good vs. bad choices.
on a scale of 1-10 we rate your edditng a 6 we noticed your clips didnt flowe too well.
ther was no music.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits.
overall we liked the conflict of the video what we liked best was the acting..”
We agree with this suggestion , and our plan to address it is to emphasize more that there is a right choice and there is a wrong choice. They say that it is a little unclear and we want to make sure the audience knows the moral of the story.
Cody and Michel:
You could add more dialogue to help your rising action. You could add more scenes to add up to the climax.
The Climax occurred when Jorge hits the car. During the resolution Jorge ran away and Demi had to go tell the person that his their car was hit. You could add to the resolution by creating more drama in the last scenes. This would help us get the impression that the driver was mad or not. We liked the shot of Jorge running away. This helped us get the idea that Jorge was fleeing the scene. We think you could have added one more shot of Jorge running away. This new shot would be a extreme long shot of Jorge and it would tell us where he is going.
We rate the editing a 7. One edit you could fix is him hitting the baseball. We noticed that between the baseball being hit and going to the car you used a fade.
We agree with this suggestion , and our plan to address it is maybe when we reshoot to add more dialogue to one of our shots to give it more detail that the audience could understand.
Shots, dialouge, action:
1 The scene of the playser walking to the baseball field.
2 The panning of the field.
3 THe shot where the baseball player hits the ball
4 Demi walking across the field.
You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. Thje climax occured when the baseball player ran away.
During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner.
You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life.
I especially liked the shot where the two ators are walking to the baseball field with the props. It helps add to the organicness of the sotyr and plot.
I don't think any shots need to be added. Just fix the editing when the baseball player hits then ball and when he runs away.
6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music.
Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits.
Overall the film was okay. If they were to work on the editing and music it would make the film better
This post is from CASSANDRA
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from CASSANDRA (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). CASSANDRA told us that SHE LIKED WHEN WE WERE WALKING TO THWE BASEBALL FIELD WITH THE PROPS, and that was helpful because IT MADE US FEEL LIKE WE DID A GOOD JOB ON THE VIDEO. In addition, CASSANDRA told us that NO SHOTS NEED TO BE ADDED, and that helped us see that WE DID GOOD ON OUR VIDEO.
The two best suggestions we got were from ___________________________ and ___________________________ (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
Luis said...
The conflict was between whether they should let the car owner know they broke their car window or not. The shots that contributed to the rising action was when Demi and Jorge started running. The climax occured when Demi decided to tell the car owner that they broke his window.We especially liked the shot where Jorge is telling Demi that he cannot let the car owner know about the window and then just runs of. We rate your editing a 6; use cleaner shots and make the video flow smoother. We suggest you guys use music when Demi and Jorge run off to add tension to the overall effect of the film. Your titels and credits wher good. Overall good job!
-Luis and Lizzy
This post is from LUIS and LIZZY.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from LUIS and LIZZY (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). THEY told us that THEY LIKED WAS WHEN I TOLD DEMI THAT I CANNOT LET THE CAR OWNER KNOW THAT I BROKE HIS/HER WINDOW, and that was helpful because WE KNOW WE CAPTURED THE VIEWERS ATTENTION. In addition, LUIS ANS LIZZY told us that THEY SUGGESTED WE USE MUSIC and that helped us see that MUSIC WOULD MAKE THE SHORT FILM A WHOLE LOT BETTER AND ENTERTAINING.
The two best suggestions we got were from ___________________________ and ___________________________ (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
The conflict was between telling the truth and not telling the truth.
Here are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. Dialog: When George says “Let’s get out of here”
2. Dialog: When Demi says “Wait, shouldn’t we tell the person”
3. Dialog: When George says “No way no one saw us do it…”
4. Action: When they are first running away.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising actions:
1. You could have someone be a witness to the accident.
2. You could also have the car alarm go off which brings attention to them and the truck.
The climax occurred when Demi stays at the Baseball field when Jorge decides to run away because he is scared.
The resolution is when Demi admits to Alicia that she hit her car, and Alicia accepts her apology without making her pay for the damages.
You could add to the resolution by making Jorge come back and feel bad because Demi confessed instead of him. Basically, what happens is Jorge confesses and stops Demi from taking the blame this would help the audience understand that confessing, and owning up to the truth is better than your own self-pride.
We especially like the back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, because it helped emphasize the idea that the hitting and pitching was in actual time (realistic).
We think you should replace the shot when Jorge and Demi are having the conversation in the beginning (the two-shot with the rule of thirds). The new shot would still be a two-shot, but maybe instead fix the angle because the angles alternate from one side of the characters to the other.
On a scale of 1-10, we give the editing a 5. One edit we would change was when Jorge is trying to leave because there are about three clips that are cut off. Jorge’s dialogue and facial expressions are very choppy, and usually cut too late in the beginning of the clips and too early in the end of the clips.
We noticed that between the two-shot conversation and the transition onto the track near the baseball field, you used a straight cut. We would have used a dissolve, or a fade to black instead because it was very confusing that the locations changed so suddenly without a proper transition.
There was no music in this video. The places I think music could be added is in the beginning of the video when Jorge and Demi first have there conversation. I think it would be a good idea to add some fast-paced, low music to imply that there are young yet civil with each other. Another place sound-effects could be added is when the ball hits the windshield, possibly a car alarm sound as Jorge and Demi run away. Another place where you could use music is when Demi confesses to Alicia that she hit the car.
The title of the film was “The Fly Ball”, which gave us an introduction to what the film would be about. It grabbed our attention because the fluorescence of the blue around the title was fantastic. The only other suggestion we have for the opening title is to center it. There was only one title to work with (the opening title). There were No Credits, so you may want to include those next time.
Overall, we thought you film sent a good message about honesty. What we liked best was the acting of Demi and Jorge because they are rarely seen in front of the camera. Our Strongest suggestion is that you include music, and definitely fix the editing/ cuts because they are a little choppy and exclude some of the essence of the film.
-Bree and Liz
This post is from BREE and LIZ.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from BREE and LIZ. (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). THEY told us that THEY LIKED THE BACK AND FORTH SHOT OF ME AND DEMI PITCHING/HITTING THE BALL, and that was helpful becauseWE KNOW WE DID A GOOD JOB ON THE EDITING BECAUSE SHE REALLY ACTUALLY DINT PITCH THE BALL TO ME In addition, BREE AND LIZ told us that IN ONE OF THE SHOTS WE COULD OF USED A DISSOLVE SHOT INSTEAD OF A STRIGHT CUT SHOT, and that helped us see that WE COULD WORK A LITTLE MORE ON OUR EDITTING.
The two best suggestions we got were from ___________________________ and ___________________________ (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
_____________________________suggested that we ________________________________. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to_____________________________________________.
RYAN AND JULISSA
The conflict was between the girl and the boy.
1. The baseball player walking up to Sasha and asking for help with baseball.
2. The boy says to throw the ball higher.
3. The girl pitching low and suddenly throwing the ball hard.
4. A swing at the ball going far.
Suggestions:
1. You could give more spacing in between cuts and less space between other cuts.
2. You could also add a resoultion to show that the boy learned a lesson somehow.
The climax occured when the boy decides to run away after hitting a car and scuddadling out of there.
During the resoultion the girl decides to go and come clean about hitting the car and proving that you will get in less trouble by telling the truth and owning up to your responsibilites.
You could add to the resolution by having the boy show up and say something about how it was wrong to run away and he's sorry. This would help give us the impression that the boy learned a lesson or something like that.
Camera Shots:
We especially like the medium shot of the establishing shot, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were practicing at a real baseball field.
We think that you might add a shot right after the ball hits the car to see the damage. This would help the idea that a car really got damaged.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was after the boy talks about "getting out of there" after he hit the ball. We thought the out point was set to early or late because we couldn't clearly understand what he was saying.
We noticed that between your establishing shot and first shot of the boy holding the bat you used a fade to black. We would have used exactly what you used. Good job!
Music/Sound:
There was no music but good job!
Titles&Credits:
Yes, I think this title was very appealing and stood out to the viewers.
The titles were not centered and need to be fixed. They were pretty effective except for the fact that they were not centered.
Credits:
There were no credits. Great job!
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film was great and a good message and point to prove. What we liked best was the dedication you put to your characters. Our strongest suggestion is that you clean up the cuts to make it flow smoother.
AMAZING JOB GUYS!
This post is from RYAN and JULISSA.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from RYAN and JULISSA. (two different posts, not a pair saying one thing). THEY told us that THEY LIKED THE MEDIUM SHOT OF THE ESTABLISHING SHOT BECAUSE IT HELPED EMPHASIZE THE IDEA THAT WE WERE PRACTICING IN A REAL BASEBALL FIELD, and that was helpful because WE KNOW WE DID A GOOD JOB ON SHOTTING IN DIFFERENT POSSITIONS/ANGLES. In addition, RYAN AND JULISSA told us that WE COULD USE A SHOT TO SHOW THAT THE CAR GOT DAMAGED, and that helped us see that WE CAN IMPROVE OUR SHORT FILM, A WHOLE LOT BETTER WITH MUSIC AND SPECIAL EFFECTS.
The two best suggestions we got were from Casandra and Jay (again, two suggestions from different posts, a pair saying one thing).
“You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. The climax occured when the baseball player ran away.
During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner.
You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life”. WE PLAN ONE TO USE THESE SUGGESTIONS BECAUSE THEY ADRESSES OUR PROBLEMS PERFECTLY. THEY DECRIBE WHAT COULD TAKE OUR VIDEO TO THE NEXT LEVEL IN DETAIL AND DESCRIBE HOW WE SHOULD GO ABOUT FIXING OUR VIDEO. THEY ALSO SUGGEST
“6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music.
Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits”. We agree with this suggestion that we and our plan to address is indeed look for and at copy right friendly music. Also we plan on fixing some of our shots so that they are more believable and not so choppy throughout the video. Also in their suggestions they tell us where music could be added which is a big help because it gives an idea of where we could put music that the audience would like.
Bree and Liz said: “1. You could have someone be a witness to the accident.
2. You could also have the car alarm go off which brings attention to them and the truck.
The climax occurred when Demi stays at the Baseball field when Jorge decides to run away because he is scared.
The resolution is when Demi admits to Alicia that she hit her car, and Alicia accepts her apology without making her pay for the damages.
You could add to the resolution by making Jorge come back and feel bad because Demi confessed instead of him. Basically, what happens is Jorge confesses and stops Demi from taking the blame this would help the audience understand that confessing, and owning up to the truth is better than your own self-pride.
We especially like the back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, because it helped emphasize the idea that the hitting and pitching was in actual time (realistic).” We agree with this suggestion , and our plan to address it is by actually adding more sound effects to our video to give it a more realistic feel and make it more enjoyable for our audience. So we do plan on putting more sound affects with the car.
Cristabel & Jessica
1. “you could do more closeups.
2. you could also add the sound of shaterring glass.
the climax occured when the girl goes to talk to the owner of the car.
during the resolution the girl apologizes to the owner of the car and the owner forgives her and tells her its ok she doesnt have to pay.
we especialy like the shot where the boy runs away but the girl stays because it helps emphasize the idea of good vs. bad choices.
on a scale of 1-10 we rate your edditng a 6 we noticed your clips didnt flowe too well.
ther was no music.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits.
overall we liked the conflict of the video what we liked best was the acting..”
We agree with this suggestion , and our plan to address it is to emphasize more that there is a right choice and there is a wrong choice. They say that it is a little unclear and we want to make sure the audience knows the moral of the story.
Cody and Michel:
You could add more dialogue to help your rising action. You could add more scenes to add up to the climax.
The Climax occurred when Jorge hits the car. During the resolution Jorge ran away and Demi had to go tell the person that his their car was hit. You could add to the resolution by creating more drama in the last scenes. This would help us get the impression that the driver was mad or not. We liked the shot of Jorge running away. This helped us get the idea that Jorge was fleeing the scene. We think you could have added one more shot of Jorge running away. This new shot would be a extreme long shot of Jorge and it would tell us where he is going.
We rate the editing a 7. One edit you could fix is him hitting the baseball. We noticed that between the baseball being hit and going to the car you used a fade.
We agree with this suggestion , and our plan to address it is maybe when we reshoot to add more dialogue to one of our shots to give it more detail that the audience could understand.
Wednesday, March 21, 2012
Thursday, March 15, 2012
Values Reflection
1. The value we are trying to represent is honesty and doing the right thing even when its hard.
2.What our group has done is work together well and we have over come many many obstacles. For example we had to re-right our scripts and make alot of last minutes changes.
3.music and credits.
4.How the video flow and what music we could use.
5.challenges that our grouop faced was changes to our scroit , so our group decided to improvised.Also we decided to leave some parts out and change up the video.
2.What our group has done is work together well and we have over come many many obstacles. For example we had to re-right our scripts and make alot of last minutes changes.
3.music and credits.
4.How the video flow and what music we could use.
5.challenges that our grouop faced was changes to our scroit , so our group decided to improvised.Also we decided to leave some parts out and change up the video.
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